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Post by Sofia on Apr 3, 2009 15:56:46 GMT -5
The little boy won a game of musical chairs what a smile he had
the triumphant tot bragged happily to his mum but she paid no heed
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Post by Monkey on Apr 3, 2009 22:57:18 GMT -5
YOUR FACE
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Sorie
Trumpet
Whiney Porcotter[A:0]
no one sympathizes
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Post by Sorie on Apr 4, 2009 1:20:33 GMT -5
not annoying. which coming from me, says something.
If you wanted to get real big deep and philosophical, you could say this is a vague slam on parents who ignore their kids, which sometimes ends in the kids seeking attention in negative ways.
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Uber Loodle
Mural
Llama Whisperer Llama Whisperer
I put the FUN in dysfunctional.
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Post by Uber Loodle on Apr 4, 2009 14:49:57 GMT -5
Not badddd. Really not bad. Maybe it needs another haiku section thingie to elaborate on the dismissive mother?
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Post by Sofia on Apr 4, 2009 17:19:57 GMT -5
Ah, yes, the perfect summation for my poem. =P @sorie and Lauren: Thanks. ^^ Maybe I'll trying making another stanza. At the moment I couldn't think of anything.
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